Long, long ago there was a donkey that was white and a bit short. The donkey’s enemy was a short horse that was as black as night and every two days they would ambush each other.
One day the horse tried to ambush the donkey and the donkey tried to ambush the horse but Zeus and Athena the gods of the jungle were watching. Meanwhile the donkey and the horse set off at the same time to ambush each other.
Midway through the jungle horse bumped into Athena and donkey bumped
Into Zeus. “Come with me!” shouted Zeus and Athena angrily.
A couple of minutes later the donkey and the horse were at the tree house of the jungle where Zeus and Athena lived. “Where are we?” asked horse brainlessly.
“You’re in the tree house of the jungle,” replied Zeus intelligently.
“We’re sick and tired of you to fighting all the time!”Explained Athena furiously.
While the horse and the donkey were sorting things out Zeus and Athena were coming up with a plan of their own. They called the donkey and the horse backup to the tree house Zeus and Athena clapped their hands together at the same time really hard and it made a big enough boom to echo through the entire jungle.
Thirty seconds later out walked a black and white striped animal called a Zebra. And that’s how a zebra was formed.
By: Isabella Park-Jean
Isabella, i think the general story line of your myth is very good and easy to understand. It is simple enough to be a myth that could be told to children but it still has a sence of creativity in it. One thing that I would change is I would use another word besides ambush because in the first and second paragraph the word ambush was used too many times in my opinion. Also I feel that in the first paragraph there could be some history behind why the horse and the donkey hate each other, I think that if you added this it would be a complete myth.
ReplyDeleteI think that this is a cool myth because people probaly wonder why zebras have stripes. It was really creative and was more exciting to read because of that. To make it better you could talk a little bit more about the donkeys and horse' hate for eachother. Good job :)
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